More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do the benefits of studying abroad outweigh the drawbacks?
In the modern world, some students are choosing their higher study abroad because of advanced technology laps and different types of courses available there. That's why they are selecting overseas.
However
, It has a lot of benefits and drawbacksRephrase
apply
also
. In the paragraph let's discuss it.
Admittedly , The Developed country
's University has an enhanced system of their education. The Way in which they are teaching implements more practical lessons in their studies.The pupils got offered from the Management like welfare and scholarship
. if they attend class in the morning section they can go for part-time jobs for the rest of the time. Only for these reasons, do they Fix the agreement mistake
scholarships
are preferring
higher education in foreign countries.Wrong verb form
prefer
Moreover
, the students can get an opportunity to learn in a new atmosphere and also
to know about different cultures from other regions pupils.
On the other hand
, If they are getting knowledge overseas , they have some disadvantages in their own countries. Some are
types of certificates are not valid in their native region. Unnecessary verb
apply
For example
, Most Indian students go for their medical courses in other countries, because the cost of enrollment is cheaper than in India
. After getting their certification, they are not valid
to work in Correct word choice
eligible
India
. Although
they have foreign certification, India
has been conducting an Exam who study foreign and are willing to work in India
. If they pass the exam , then
only they are allowed to serve in India
.
In conclusion , It has a lot of advantages but my own country
is the best choice from my point of view. We must learn about the native country
's education system, then
we can work there also
. As a last
point, it is most important to each country
's development.Submitted by selvaselvi06 on
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Task Response
The essay lacks a clear position on whether the benefits outweigh the drawbacks. The response to the prompt is not fully developed and the discussion of benefits and drawbacks is not balanced.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. The progression of ideas is somewhat unclear, and there is a need for better paragraph organization.
Lexical Resource
There is a limited range of vocabulary used. The essay lacks precision in expressing ideas and the use of academic vocabulary is minimal.
Grammatical Range
The essay has significant grammatical errors including sentence structure, verb tense, and subject-verb agreement. There is a need for more complex sentence structures and better control over grammar.
Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...