Children can learn effectively by watching television. therefore, they should be encouraged to watch television regularly at home and at school. to what extent do you agree or disagree.

The younger ones must watch tv but not inappropriate channels. They must be taught to view the knowledge-based ones, not all the time but during their spare time when they are free. They can learn thoroughly but keep a limit or else it will become an addiction to their brains.
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I would not agree with the statement but it is helpful for those who are capable of handling
such
addictive sources. It is how the brain reacts to the source. If the brain is comfortable with what it is seeing it means there can be an advantage or a disadvantage. Positivity is the wisdom the child attracts from the image on the source, the other way around is how the child will see it as a favourite cartoon or a channel which will make it a habit to watch repetitively.
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I would agree with the statement because educational channels are a lot helpful for those who are in need of understanding and learning or being specialized in what he or she learns. Keeping a consistent look-up for a particular area of study can make him or her the dominant one in it.
For instance
, nowadays people can rewind, forward, pause and play on the television. But
this
is only for those who can afford cable tv. Concluding all the above my suggestion is to limit viewing the television but learn effectively from the limitations appending your wisdom or knowledge day in and day out without getting attached to it
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