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An increasing number of people are changing their careers. What are the reasons? Do you think it is positive or negative?

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In modern times the tendency of changing employment types has become very common ,especially among young
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. There are several reasons for changing career options and both have some positivity and negativity.
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 with, with the advancement of modern ,civilization numerous opportunities for employment have developed. Earning a livelihood no longer relies on farming or hunting. Rather there are various sectors for the survival of
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 ,
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, business, healthcare, agriculture and so on.
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,
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 can choose or change any options if they want.
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,
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 from the young generation are not inclined to stay in the same employment sector for so long. They want to explore new knowings and experiences and that's why the range of changing careers is frequent. There are so many positive outcomes of changing careers
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 as
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 can take advantage of experiencing different sorts of fields in their work life. By doing that the field and the
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 both get benefitted. The field gets new
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 and the
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 earns new knowledge. Another important advantage of changing
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 nature is, employees sometimes have to learn new skills and training for a new
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 which would enhance their capability of communication and other professional skills. The drawbacks of changing jobs mostly influenced the company rather than the workers. The reason is
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 if an organization provide training to the employees and makes them suitable for them but the
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 leaves the organization after providing service for the year, the company would lose an efficient
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.
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, changing
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 is not bring good fortune for everyone because those who are not stable in any
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 cannot learn any knowledge.
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, changing
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 nature is very common ,
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, keeping in mind the benefits and drawbacks of it would be more useful.
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