The charts below show changes in the cost of visiting a national park in the country from 2011 to 2018 as well as the number of visitors to national parks each year.

The charts below show changes in the cost of visiting a national park in the country from 2011 to 2018 as well as the number of visitors to national parks each year.
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The line graph shows the price for entry to National Parks
while
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the bar graph shows the figure for
guests
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from 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, from 2011 to 2018 there were variations and changes in the prices for entering the
park
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,
as well as
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changes in the cost of entering the
park
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per person. In 2011 approximately the price of admission to the garden per person was $7,
this
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was changing in 2013 with an increase in the cost of admission per person to $8.
In contrast
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, the price in 2015 and 2018 was similar, costing approximately $15. 2017 saw the highest number of
guests
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to the
park
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reaching approximately 0.53
million
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.
On the other hand
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, in 2011 there was the least number of
guests
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to the
park
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with an approximate sum of 0.28
million
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. The trend of
guests
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to the
park
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in the years 2013, 2014, and 2015 was almost similar, obtaining the
park
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's approximately visit of 0.40
million
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.
Finally
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, the national
park
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had a drop in the number of
guests
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in 2018 to 0.45
million
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compared to 2017.
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