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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world.  Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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The difference between countries is disappearing
due to
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people
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 buying the same
goods
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 anywhere in the world.
Although
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 the public conveniently shops at a low price, there is a greater negative influence on local culture, even if it will be damaged.
Therefore
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, I believe that
this
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 situation should be prevented from happening in all countries. One obvious advantage to appearing similar
products
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 all over the world is that it offers
people
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 easily getting lower price
goods
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 from other countries. When we want to own something abroad, we usually pay so much money,
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 as travelling expenses, duties and so forth, and waste a lot of time to get it.
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, a large amount of cost and time will be saved if they are sold in my country.
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, the same
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 existing in every nation will lead to a problem that the special culture will be destroyed. With the growth of living costs, more and more
people
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 choose cheaper
goods
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 that are often made by a huge amount of production.
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 particular and traditional things are so hard production that will pay huge prices. To be specific, similar and boring
products
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 will be
instead
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 of national
products
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 in every country where domestic DNA will difficult to find. In conclusion, in the short term,
people
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 really gain that the cost of
goods
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 is reduced. in the long term, the civilization belonging to the nation will slowly disappear. Compared with the domestic characteristic dying out, the small cost reduction in the short period is totally unimportant.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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