Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and give any relevant example or experience you might have to support your answer.

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Education plays a vital role in everyone’s life
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children
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, the question of whether learning at
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or at
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is better has sparked a heated debate.
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indoor education offers better protection with individual learning and opportunities for families to bond, schools have
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students
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with a wide
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of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds, a superior
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of materials, teachers,
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learning environment and so on.
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views have their own merits, I am of the honest opinion that
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is the best place for a
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when it is
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overall
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development. First and foremost, learning at
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offers a great deal of
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, particularly educational
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the basics are certainly covered, students have
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especially learn and when. Students can emphasize
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the subject matter that gets them excited, whether
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math, physics, history or creative writing.
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a great deal of physical
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is ensured for the
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who learn at
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to say that, families have much more
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to vacation at odd times because of not having any strict schedule of
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hours and
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can spend
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quality time with their parents which is a great opportunity to learn many values from them.
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,
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have emotional
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. Students very often undergo
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with bullies, fellow
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students
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pressure, monotony, and competition. In the
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environment, these factors are absent.
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are able to think, dress and act the way they want.
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but not the least, since
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who lean at
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can spend much more time; they can form significantly
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family relationships.
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school
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the school
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has so many vantage points for ensuring
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the development
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of a
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, attending
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gives the
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to
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meet new
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with a wide
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of
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abilities
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and from a variety of social backgrounds. Some get close only to become good friends for many years or even
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some remain only classmates.
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, if the
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learn at
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, they will likely not
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to many
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kids
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. Meeting new
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and socializing
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stretches their horizon of knowledge.
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, if we want to make our
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sociable, it is best to attend
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;
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they might end up leading only a solitary life. To add with, schools
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teach how to cope with bullies, gossip, peer pressure and competition. Again,
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is no more
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place which only deals with academic purposes.
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has become the first stepping ground
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a
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, wherein he can learn
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more rather than merely rote learning. Learning basic etiquette, developing hobbies, refining them,
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skilled at multitasking are some of the many things that a
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provides a
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with.
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school
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the school
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has teachers who are trained
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a particular
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subject so that
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can get better lesson results
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clear concept about the particular subject. What is more,
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supplies
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with physical resources
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example, library books,
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equipment, exercise equipment, and musical instruments. From what has been discussed above it can be easily said that
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are better off in a
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ambience. Yet, spending time with family and individual learning are crucial, the wide
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of expertise and resources that
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belongs to cannot be found in the
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. At
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, sometimes
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may experience some troubling social
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, but so too does the real world,
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must learn to master these on their own.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
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