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Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child’s development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and give any relevant example or experience you might have to support your answer.

#people #children #home #child’s #development #school #methods #support
Education plays a vital role in everyone’s life
particularly
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children
.
However
, the question of whether learning at
home
 or at
school
 is better has sparked a heated debate.
Whereas
 indoor education offers better protection with individual learning and opportunities for families to bond, schools have
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student
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students
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 with a wide
range
 of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds, a superior
range
 of materials, teachers,
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 learning environment and so on.
Although
,
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 both
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views have their own merits, I am of the honest opinion that
school
 is the best place for a
child
 when it is
about
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overall
 development. First and foremost, learning at
home
 offers a great deal of
freedom
, particularly educational
freedom
.
While
 the basics are certainly covered, students have
flexibility
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of
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they
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 especially learn and when. Students can emphasize
on
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the subject matter that gets them excited, whether
that is
 math, physics, history or creative writing.
Next,
a great deal of physical
freed
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 is ensured for the
children
 who learn at
home
.
That is
 to say that, families have much more
freedom
 to vacation at odd times because of not having any strict schedule of
school
 hours and
kids
 can spend
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quality time with their parents which is a great opportunity to learn many values from them.
Additionally
,
kids
 have emotional
freedom
. Students very often undergo
troubles
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 with bullies, fellow
student
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students
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 pressure, monotony, and competition. In the
home
 environment, these factors are absent.
Children
 are able to think, dress and act the way they want.
Last
 but not the least, since
kids
 who lean at
home
 can spend much more time; they can form significantly
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 family relationships.
However
,
school
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the school
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 has so many vantage points for ensuring
development
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the development
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 of a
child
.
Firstly
, attending
school
 gives the
child
to
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 meet new
children
 with a wide
range
 of
ability
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abilities
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 and from a variety of social backgrounds. Some get close only to become good friends for many years or even
lifetime
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,
while
 some remain only classmates.
Conversely
, if the
children
 learn at
home
, they will likely not
able
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 to many
such
kids
. Meeting new
children
 and socializing
also
 stretches their horizon of knowledge.
Consequently
, if we want to make our
children
 sociable, it is best to attend
school
;
home
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 they might end up leading only a solitary life. To add with, schools
also
 teach how to cope with bullies, gossip, peer pressure and competition. Again,
school
 is no more
the
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 place which only deals with academic purposes.
School
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 has become the first stepping ground
of
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 a
child
, wherein he can learn
lot
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 more rather than merely rote learning. Learning basic etiquette, developing hobbies, refining them,
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 skilled at multitasking are some of the many things that a
school
 provides a
child
 with.
Similarly
,
school
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the school
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 has teachers who are trained
in
particular
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a particular
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 subject so that
children
 can get better lesson results
in
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 clear concept about the particular subject. What is more,
school
 supplies
children
 with physical resources
for
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 example, library books,
sport
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 equipment, exercise equipment, and musical instruments. From what has been discussed above it can be easily said that
children
 are better off in a
school
 ambience. Yet, spending time with family and individual learning are crucial, the wide
range
 of expertise and resources that
school
 belongs to cannot be found in the
home
. At
school
, sometimes
children
 may experience some troubling social
situation
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situations
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, but so too does the real world,
children
 must learn to master these on their own.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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