Now a lot of people in college are doing academic study. We should encourage them to learn vocational skill (like plumbers and electricians). Do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that
although
there is an increasing number of individuals achieving more academic study because they think it can bring more employment opportunities in life, others believe that students should be encouraged to study vocational skills. In my opinion, I agree with
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that acquiring certain vocational skills should be more beneficial for some reasons.
To begin
with, even though studying in typical academic study is likely to guarantee that
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will thrive in high professions,
such
as doctors,
engineerings
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,
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and many more, it requires a great
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of tuition fees and it is considered time-consuming in most
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courses
countries
.
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, some of my friends who are
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doctors from well-known universities not only took years to achieve their career goals but
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also
spent on their tuition fees for millions.
Moreover
, some specific blue-collar jobs are required to work far away from home to seek
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better employment
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opportunities
, which results in more costs of transportation and living.
On the other hand
, most
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vocational
courses take a shorter period of time to finish.
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is why many people should take
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into consideration because it is not worth spending many years to complete certain degrees. Another reason for
this
is that most vocational colleges
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fewer tuition fees or extra payments by far as they want to promote local employment for society in the long run, which is important because it will help students seek jobs more easily.
For instance
, in my country, there is a shortage of electricians, so the government has to hire many companies from overseas.
This
leads to adverse results. So, more and more individuals should take vocational courses. In conclusion,
although
many people want to be hired in high professional jobs, many sectors in a nation should have more employees
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from vocational institutes. I am opinion of
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of society should consider studying in vocational colleges.
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