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The world today is a safer place than it was a hundred years ago, and government should stop spending money large amounts of money on their armed forces.

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It is now some time since the whole
world
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 was involved in one
war
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. The
world
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 nowadays is no comparison to the past, when millions of soldiers were lost on the battlefield. Now the
world
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 is significantly safer than previously, it can be argued that governments should stop spending large amounts of money on their military
forces
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. The
last
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World
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War
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 dates back nearly seventy years and, since 1945, no conflict has taken place in western
countries
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.
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, people have advised spending money on necessities within society
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 of the armed
forces
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.
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,
this
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 is very difficult, as even though no considerable conflict has taken place in western
countries
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, they are still involved in the conflicts of other
countries
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.
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, the USA's contribution to the Iraqi
war
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 has only recently ended. For
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 involvement of military
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 in foreign lands,
countries
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 still need to have strong armed
forces
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, in case they are needed. In some
countries
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 like the UK, the military is already weaker than it has been in the past.
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, historically, a hundred years is not that long and because no conflict had happened recently,
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 does not mean that there will be no
war
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 in the future. At the outbreak of
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War
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 Two, the UK was seriously under-prepared, as it had been considered that the horrors of
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War
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 One had convinced everyone of the usefulness of
war
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.
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this
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 topic, certain armed
forces
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 are necessary for major
countries
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 even though the
world
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 is safer than a hundred years ago. They might need to intervene in conflicts in other
countries
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 and
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 peace is by no means assured for the future.
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