Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. Why is this the case? Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
It is true that many
children
enjoy using smartphones. However
, by overusing mobile devices, children
’s communication skill development and precious family time
will be reduced.
High technology devices such
as smartphones play an important role not only in an adult’s life,
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also
in the new generation adolescent’s
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of adolescent’s
children
. In contrast
, the number of newly released IOS or android games increased sharply through these years. This
number indicates that more and more children
used their phones for entertainment purposes. For example
, surprisingly, my nephew’s screen time
shows 3 times higher than that of
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While
many people show no concern toward this
situation, I held the opposite idea.
There are several negative consequences resulting from overusing a mobile device in children
. Because watching live streamings and playing games are one-way communication, youngers
will not be able to develop their social skills properly. Correct your spelling
younger
For example
, a game-addicted adolescent could not fluently express his or her ideas in class. Moreover
, time
spent on these devices will run over precious time
with their parents. Through interacting with real people, children
can learn new skills such
as speaking and listening. For instance
, when I was young, my mom used to read me bedtime stories. Currently, influenced by those story books, I love to read a variety of books, fiction or non-fiction.
In conclusion, even though high-technology communication tools are convenient and useful,
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hence
, it could have a negative impact instead
of a positive one.Submitted by purita.w on
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