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ome people think teaching situation of teachers and students in a classroom will no longer exist, do you agree or diagree.

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some
people
 think the teaching
situation
 of
teachers
 and
students
 in a classroom will no longer exist and I disagree with
this
 opinion. on the one hand, the teaching
situation
 of
teachers
 and
students
 on the internet will exist by the year 2025,it may bring some advantages.
firstly
,when
students
study
 online,it means they do not need to use the papers that they can
study
 on their iPad or computers,it is more eco-friendly for the environment.
secondly
, it can promote the technology innovation because compies should improve their technology to avoid accidents happen in online classes ,
therefore
 ,it
also
 can help country technological development.
finally
.the online classroom is very convenient because it is no time and place limit, workers and disabled
people
 can learn online. one the other hand ,the teaching
situation
 of
teachers
 and
students
 on the internet
also
 will lead to some disadvantages.
firstly
, when
students
study
 online at their home,it will affect
study
 efficiency,because when
students
study
 online, they may probably be influenced by computer games so that
students
 can not concentrate on their studies .
secondly
 when
people
study
 online,it means they could not meet each other very frequently,
therefore
 ,it is not benefits for young
people
 to communicate with other
students
,and
also
 it is bad to improve their social skill,and it does not conduce to maintain the friendship.
finally
, if children use the computer to
study
 for
long
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 time ,it is bad for their eyesight
moreover
 , young
people
 are easily influenced by what they constantly see and listen to,so the government have the responsibility to protect children get away from the internet. in conclusion, I disagree that the teaching
situation
 of
teachers
 and
students
 in a classroom will no longer exist .
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