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Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than work for a company or organization. what might this be the case? what could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Compared with the past, the methods of working and finding a new
job
 have dramatically changed. These days, many men and women choose to be self-employed rather than
work
 for a company. I will discuss these in
this
 article.
Firstly
, the most important reason
that is
people
 prefer to self-employed is the competitive market which means the number of
job
 opportunities is not the same as the number of
people
 who need a
job
.
Moreover
, the population doesn'
t
 have a
job
. So they open a new business up to make
money
.
Secondly
, many
people
 have a kind of personality that can'
t
work
 with a boss or co-workers.
Therefore
, they prefer to
work
 alone and have freedom
instead
 of discussing with someone else.
On the other hand
, the biggest disadvantages of being self-employed are the risk and stressful situations which means it is possible to lose everything
such
 as the
money
that is
 invested at the beginning time.
Moreover
, you should have a smart idea that nobody does. Because, if you don'
t
 have a new idea and an exact plan, so you can'
t
 improve your business and you failed. The second disadvantage is that you have to have huge
money
 to invest at the start point of your company.
For example
, Cafe Noon in Iran started its business with 1 million tomans 6 years ago which
has
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 huge
money
. In conclusion, being self-employed needs a professional plan to be successful.
However
, these days, many
people
 choose to
work
 for themselves because of many reasons that I mentioned.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-employed
  • company
  • organization
  • freedom
  • independence
  • income potential
  • flexibility
  • working hours
  • working location
  • passions
  • interests
  • decision-making
  • business practices
  • disadvantages
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