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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
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The bar chart illustrates the
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amount
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 of
hours
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 that
Chinese
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,
American
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,
Turkish
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 and
Brazilian
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tourists
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 used per
day
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 to do 3 activities (At the beach, Reading
books
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,
Visiting
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and Visiting
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places
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) on a holiday in Greece in August 2019.
Overall
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, the
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 spent most of their
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 reading
books
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while
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 visiting
places
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 had the least
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 of
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 that tourist spent
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 on it.
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 and
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tourists
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 spent
highest
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amount
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 of
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on
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reading
books
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. Whilst the
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 and
Brazilian
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tourists
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 used most of their
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 at the beach. In
term
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 of reading
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,
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tourists
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were
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spent the longest
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 on it about 8
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 and 5
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 each
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Chinese
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tourists
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 spent
a
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double the
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 of
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on
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reading
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 compare to
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tourists
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 which only spent 4
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reading
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,
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tourists
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 spent most of their
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 in a
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 at the beach around 5
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 and 6
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Which in
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 was double
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time
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the time
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 spent compared to
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the Chinese
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which
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who
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 spent their
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 around 3
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, the highest number of
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 spent on visiting
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were
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was
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 about 3
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in
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by
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tourists
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which
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and
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 none of
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tourists
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the tourists
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 spent more than 3
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visiting
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, hours, chinese, american, turkish, brazilian, tourists, day, books, places, time with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number
  • leisure activities
  • tourists
  • nationalities
  • cultural trends
  • interests
  • vacation
  • influence
  • participation
  • impact
  • weather
  • events
  • festivals
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