The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
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The bar chart illustrates the
amount
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number
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of
hours
that
Chinese
,
American
,
Turkish
and
Brazilian
tourists
used per
day
to do 3 activities (At the beach, Reading
books
,
Visiting
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and Visiting
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places
) on a holiday in Greece in August 2019.
Overall
, the
tourists
spent most of their
time
reading
books
while
visiting
places
had the least
amount
of
hours
that tourist spent
time
on it.
Chinese
and
American
tourists
spent
highest
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the highest
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amount
of
time
on
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reading
books
. Whilst the
Turkish
and
Brazilian
tourists
used most of their
time
at the beach. In
term
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terms
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of reading
books
,
Chinese
and
American
tourists
were
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spent the longest
time
on it about 8
hours
and 5
hours
each
day
.
Which
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apply
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Chinese
tourists
spent
a
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double the
amount
of
time
on
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reading
books
compare to
Turkish
and
Brazilian
tourists
which only spent 4
hours
on
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show examples
reading
books
.
On the other hand
,
Turkish
and
Brazilian
tourists
spent most of their
time
in a
day
at the beach around 5
hours
and 6
hours
per
day
.
Which in
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In
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Brazilian
was double
time
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the time
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spent compared to
Chinese
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the Chinese
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which
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who
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spent their
time
around 3
hours
per
day
.
Furthermore
, the highest number of
hours
spent on visiting
places
were
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was
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about 3
hours
per
day
in
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by
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American
and
Turkish
tourists
which
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and
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none of
tourists
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the tourists
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spent more than 3
hours
on
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apply
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visiting
places
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, hours, chinese, american, turkish, brazilian, tourists, day, books, places, time with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number
  • leisure activities
  • tourists
  • nationalities
  • cultural trends
  • interests
  • vacation
  • influence
  • participation
  • impact
  • weather
  • events
  • festivals
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