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Now a alot of people in college are doing academic study. We should encourge them to learn vocational skill ( like plumbers and electricity). Do you agree or disagree.?

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Most people have argued that in higher education institutions students are relying so much on the knowledge instilled in them from books.
However
, it is advised that
skills
 involving the use of hands should be promoted
for example
 plumbing and electrical works. I completely agree with
this
 statement as there would be more job opportunities
as well as
 promote a sense of independence in people. First and foremost, many human beings depend on being employed by either the government or the private sector for a livelihood.
This
 is because all they ever learnt at universities were academic studies resulting in poor motor
skills
.Having the students learn how to work with their own hands will promote job creation as one will not depend on being employed in order to meet their basic needs.
For example
,the world's population continue to increase as days go by and there is a scarcity of employment,a person who trained themselves on how to work with their hands has more advantage compared to one who doesn't have those
skills
 as the competition is high.
Hence
, encouraging learners to study vocational
skills
 is important.
Secondly
, learning vocational
skills
 promotes independence.One does not have to go looking for a worker to fix a broken tap or clogged sink.
therefore
,having these
skills
 taught in colleges will benefit the Learners more.
For instance
, if a tap breaks ,someone can fix it themselves and end up saving money
instead
 of calling people to repair it. In conclusion, in today's higher institutions,vocational
skills
 should be included in the curriculum to enable learners to be independent
as well as
 create employment opportunities.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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