A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children’s sports team for two years, or to pay for two open air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter • describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team • summarise the benefits of paying for the concerts • say how you think the company should spend the money

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

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letter to express my opinion regarding your business' proposal to invest in our local community.

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, the main merit of financing the children's sports group for two years is that most players come from low-income families, some of whom can not keep on paying for their kid's sports expenses. Another reason is that if your company decides to help them, they will be able to keep on training regularly to win the Town's Soccer Tournament Award

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year.

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, the biggest benefit of sponsoring two outdoor musical concerts in the neighbourhood is that people have not had the opportunity to go to a local entertainment event since 2008's folk music festival.

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, it would

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be beneficial to cheer everyone's spirits up after the flood catastrophe we had

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Christmas. In my opinion, it would be best if your company provided one year of financial support to the children's sports team,

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, sponsoring one outdoor musical event for the population.

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way, everyone would be happy as people would be able to enjoy both activities. Thank you for your kindness within our community and I look forward to your final decision. Yours faithfully, Amanda Lago

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

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Task Achievement: 8.0

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