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With the rise of e-books, come the decline in paper books . Some people see this ad a good forward step while others do not. What are advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

The scope of hardcopy
books
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 is getting down with the entry of softcopy
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. A few sections of society consider it a positive effect, on the other
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hand
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 only
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 at its dark side.
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 fashion has both pros and cons, which I will discuss in the following paragraphs.
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 with, technology has completely changed the way of reading, as with access to the internet, we can search
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 type of literature. To explain it more, nowadays there is no need to carry
books
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 with oneself if anyone has a desire to read
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books
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books,
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 because
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books
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 just require little
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 of Megabytes in your computer or mobile. Adding to
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,
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books
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 are easily available online, for no one has to go to the market to buy a hard copy of a particular gazette. Many websites are in use,
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,
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kindle.com
,example kindle.com which has a wide range of online or offline literature.
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, the weight and easy accessibility of
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books
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have the upper hand in today's life.
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, e-book reading has some drawbacks
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 reading on
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puts
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 bad effects on vision or
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the brain
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. In detail, reading for long on
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a mobile
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 or computer makes the person more
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exhausted
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 than reading with hard
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 and
also
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 reading online has side effects
on
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radiation
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the radiation
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 those are emitted by the internet or
screen
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 directly.
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, sometimes it causes loss of vision or other mental issues like irritability, forgetfulness or other behavioural disorders.
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, many school-going children have
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 spectacle in their eyes which was not
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that
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 is the effect of watching the
screen
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 for long hours.
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, reading on
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 affects the human body mentally and physically. In summary,
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e-
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books
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 have many
benefits
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benefits,
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 their negative impacts are
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avoidable
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unavoidable
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. Paper
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books sale
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 should be encouraged.

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structure
Plan your essay first. Write a short intro that state your view. List the main points you will discuss.
content
Stick to facts you can prove. Some claims in the essay are not true (for example, that screens give real radiation).
grammar
Use simple, short sentences. Avoid long and hard words. Check grammar.
coherence
Use linking words to show order and flow (First, Also, Finally). This helps readers follow.
conclusion
End with a clear conclusion that restates your view in one line.
content
The writer shows both sides of the topic.
structure
There is a good link between ideas in some parts.
content
There are real examples such as Kindle used.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Portability, Accessibility, Environmental Benefits, Cost-Effective, Customizability, Digital Strain, Dependence on Technology, Tactile Experience, Digital Rights Management (DRM), Aesthetic Decor, Prolonged Periods, Visual Impairments, Disrupt, Contingent, Resale, Lend, Backlit Screens
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