Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?
The number of sick
people
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who decide
decide
to purchase Change the verb form
decides
medicine
that does not need a doctor’s prescription and decide to Add an article
the medicine
dianose
their own health Correct your spelling
diagnose
issue
is increasing. I don’t believe that Fix the agreement mistake
issues
this
is a correct approach as self-diagnose and treatment without enough knowledge can be harmful. Moreover
, receiving reliable treatment from medical professionals helps reduce their medical expense burdens.
There are many pills available at the drug store, which can be purchased without pharmacist’s
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a pharmacist’s
percription
, Correct your spelling
prescription
as well as
free online resources explain about how to treat your own disease. While
this
can be convenient and time saving
for some Add a hyphen
time-saving
people
, but
without professional Correct word choice
apply
knowledge
it can be risky. Add a comma
,knowledge
For example
, in order to sell their own medicine, some companies might not be faithful to their audiences, advertising invalid informations
and brainwashing you to buy their products. They might easily Change the wording
information
pieces of information
stated
that their pills can cure any symptoms and sickness. These dangerous pills can be deadly harmful to the person consuming Change the verb form
state
be stated
it
. Not only they could not cure the treatment efficiently, but Correct pronoun usage
them
also
can cause long term
negative consequences to the body.
The idea of going to the hospital to receive Add a hyphen
long-term
accurate
Correct article usage
an accurate
diagnose
from the medical staff might sound Replace the word
diagnosis
time consuming
and inconvenient for some Add a hyphen
time-consuming
people
. However
, I believe that it is the safest decision. By visiting
their usual doctor might not be as long as many Change preposition
Visiting
people
think because all of your
health records are in his/her hand, Correct pronoun usage
their
hence
, they only need to show up for additional check
Fix the agreement mistake
checks
up
about their symptoms. Receiving treatments from reliable and educated professionals will increase the cure chance and decrease harmful risks. Take my family as an example, we have our own Change preposition
apply
family’s
doctor, who has been treating us since I was a kid. He understands about allergies that run Change noun form
family
un
our family without Correct your spelling
in
needed
to take any additional Wrong verb form
needing
test
.
In conclusion, receiving treatments from their usual doctor can make sure that they will Fix the agreement mistake
tests
received
reliable diagnose and safe medicine. Change the verb form
receive
be received
Thus
, advantages
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the advantages
are overweigh
Change the verb form
are overweighed
are overweighing
disadvantages
.Correct article usage
the disadvantages
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