Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

The number of sick
people
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decide
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to purchase
medicine
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the medicine
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that does not need a doctor’s prescription and decide to
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diagnose
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is increasing. I don’t believe that
this
is a correct approach as self-diagnose and treatment without enough knowledge can be harmful.
Moreover
, receiving reliable treatment from medical professionals helps reduce their medical expense burdens. There are many pills available at the drug store, which can be purchased without
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percription
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prescription
,
as well as
free online resources explain about how to treat your own disease.
While
this
can be convenient and
time saving
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for some
people
,
but
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without professional
knowledge
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it can be risky.
For example
, in order to sell their own medicine, some companies might not be faithful to their audiences, advertising invalid
informations
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and brainwashing you to buy their products. They might easily
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that their pills can cure any symptoms and sickness. These dangerous pills can be deadly harmful to the person consuming
it
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them
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. Not only they could not cure the treatment efficiently, but
also
can cause
long term
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negative consequences to the body. The idea of going to the hospital to receive
accurate
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diagnose
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from the medical staff might sound
time consuming
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and inconvenient for some
people
.
However
, I believe that it is the safest decision.
By visiting
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their usual doctor might not be as long as many
people
think because all of
your
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health records are in his/her hand,
hence
, they only need to show up for additional
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up
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about their symptoms. Receiving treatments from reliable and educated professionals will increase the cure chance and decrease harmful risks. Take my family as an example, we have our own
family’s
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doctor, who has been treating us since I was a kid. He understands about allergies that run
un
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our family without
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to take any additional
test
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. In conclusion, receiving treatments from their usual doctor can make sure that they will
received
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reliable diagnose and safe medicine.
Thus
,
advantages
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are overweigh
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disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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