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The rise of convenice foods has helped people keep up with the speed of modern lifestyle. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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NOWADAYS, THE EASIER AND QUICK ACCESS TO FAST FOODS HAS IMPROVED THE WAY OF LEADING WITH THE SPEEDED DEMANDS REQUIRED BY THE CONTEMPORARY LIFESTYLE. IN
THIS
 ESSAY, I WILL PRESENT THE IMPORTANCE OF
THIS
 TREND WHEN IT COMES TO BEING MORE PRODUCTIVE AT job AND HOW IT HELPS THE SOCIETY TO DEAL WITH ITS DAILY ROUTINE AS BOTH IMPORTANT ADVANTAGES,
WHILE
 I WILL ANALYSE HOW THE moment SPENT PREPARING
THIS
 cuisine IS A IRRELEVANT DISADVANTAGE IN
THIS
 CASE. ON ONE HAND, PREPARING THE meal CAN BRING A SENSE OF RELAXATION FOR SOME PEOPLE, AS IT CAN PROVIDE A
hour
 WITH FAMILY AND
ALSO
, A GREAT WAY TO RELEASE STRESS AFTER A BUSY DAY AT
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.
FOR EXAMPLE
, THE PERSON CAN USE THE stage BETWEEN THE cooking PREPARATION AND THE DINNER
HOUR
 TO WATCH AN AMAZING AND INTERESTING MOVIE.
HOWEVER
, BECAUSE SOCIETY ARE EVEN MORE SPENDING THEIR life OUTSIDE OF THEIR HOUSES, IT CAN DELAY A PARTICULAR ACTIVITY,
SUCH
 AS job OR STUDY, GETTING WORSE A STRESSFUL ATMOSPHERE FOR
THIS
 PEARSON.
ON THE OTHER HAND
, INDIVIDUALS WHO USUALLY DELIVER THEIR FOOD, ARE ABLE TO HAVE MORE FREE HOURS TO MANAGE THEIR day AND ACHIEVE OTHER DAILY DEALS.
FOR EXAMPLE
, THEY CAN BE READY
TO
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production
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produce
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 FASTER BECAUSE THEY DO NOT NEED TO WORRY ABOUT THE LONG stage SPENT IN foodstuff PREPARATION.
MOREOVER
, THEY CAN EASILY PERFORM DAILY ACTIVITIES
SUCH
 AS TAKING CHILDREN TO SCHOOL AND SHOPPING AS THEY PROBABLY WILL HAVE
hour
 ENOUGH TO DO THESE THINGS.
FINALLY
,
day
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 WELL MANAGE WILL BRING A SENSE OF SATISFACTIONS AND REALIZATION TO
THIS
 PERSON, WHICH SHOULD PROVIDE A FULLFILD SENSATION.
TO SUM UP
, AS MENTIONED BEFORE, THOSE ADVANTAGES OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGES SINCE THEY CAN BRING BETTER FEELINGS FOR INDIVIDUALS AND
ALSO
 MORE FREE
hour
 TO MANAGE THEIR BUSY LIVES.
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