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Some people believe that living in an apartment instead of a university dormitory has many advantages while others say that it has many disadvantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in an apartment instead of a university dormitory.

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Deciding on an environment for studying sometimes becomes very hard.
Likewise
, for going to school or college if it is far away from home, we have to decide whether to stay at a university
dormitory
 or choose an apartment. I strongly disagree with the statement that living in an apartment is having more advantages than a
dormitory
.
In addition
 to my opinion, living in a
dormitory
 has more advantages like we can be surrounded by different people and of course limited by some rules.
Moreover
,
this
 can build our minds to stop thinking about the freedom of wants and needs we can do ourselves. Relatively
this
 will restrict to staying in and focus more on studies and have more options to clear doubts with fellow mates. In these,facility there are some tasks that are paid like laundry, cleaning and food which is interesting and time-saving.
In contrast
, living in an apartment will lead to freely environment that can have more distractions.
Instead
 of studying, we can have more options for having fun and outings.
Hence
, you would not be having any kind of barrier to shop, watching movies, playing outdoor games, having social gatherings and so on.
Furthermore
, there is no one to stop and list out the important things you need to do.
Therefore
, it is the biggest disadvantage to paying for the facility
that is
 more disturbing and not worth it.
Thereupon
,
according to
 me staying in a
dormitory
 is the best option to choose from where you do fewer chores and can focus more on your studies.
In addition
, there is only one way to stay focused when you are in less contact with material things.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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