The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart gives information on UAE government spending in 2000. The total budget was AED 315 billion. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
presents
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bar chart illustrates information about the
expenditure
of the
government's
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government
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in UAE. The total amount of
budgets
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is 315
billion
. From an
overall
perspective, it's
clearly
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that, there is have 10 sectors, and
many
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any
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portion
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of the pie chart's spending money
expenditure
shows
excessive
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an excessive
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amount
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.
To begin
with,
the
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social security, health and personal social services, education, and
defense
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expenditure
a significantly different from others. And they
are demonstrate
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respectively 100, 53, 38, and 22 AED
billion
.
In addition
, every part of the money goes
for
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distinguishing segments of the country.
On the other hand
,
other
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six
part
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of the chart divides into
a
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small portions.
Firstly
, the housing and
environments
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environment
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spends
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AED 15
billion
, debt interest and other
expenditure
illustrates
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us same measures 23
billion
. Law and order AED 7
billion
and industry,
agriculture
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and agriculture
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shows respectively less
for
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billion
than love and order.
Eventually
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most law trend
is transport
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is transported
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, and
expenditure
is 9
billion
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