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Some people think that schools are no longer necessary because people can acquire information on the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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These days most
people
 particularly pupils are learning the
internet
 better than learn school. Fewer and fewer
people
 opinion that academe is no longer essential
due to
people
 can acquire education on the
internet
. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss some of the motivations why they learn from the
internet
instead
 of from school textbooks and I will try to draw some conclusions. Let`s look at learning on the
internet
. Nowadays, learning the
internet
 is a vital act in giving information and knowledge. It is a good resource for education to illustrate, these days, there are a lot of miscellaneous books available on different websites which are not affordable for everyone so,
this
 page gives easy access for many to acquire information.
On the other hand
, more screen time means deterioration of health
such
 as visual impairment behaviour change. There may be a lot of data on the
internet
 but
this
 can never substitute for learning centres as the role of lectures is crucial and the
internet
 is not dependable. Learning centres teach each one or
people
 but the
internet
 or websites teach everyone. By way of conclusion, there are hundreds of examples that schools need effective methods to acquire knowledge. Even with the advanced technology attending school is something irreplaceable. Personally, I disagree that schools do not important
due to
people
 can acquire information on the
internet
.
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