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People’s shopping habits depend on their age rather than other factors. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays,
people
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 of all
age
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 groups do shopping regularly and it has become one of the habits in their life. Youth buy trending
products
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, early middle
age
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 groups
such
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 as working
people
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 will
purchase
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 beauty
products
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 and clothes for each month, and old
people
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 mainly acquire medical supplies and entertainment tools. So in my opinion, I agree that shopping habits are based on
people
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’s
age
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 rather than other factors.
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, the young
age
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 group (15 - 25 years) is very addicted to social media and follows celebrities. So, they buy dresses, sunglasses, and shoes based on the trend. If their friends or
neighbors
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 have any new
products
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such
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 as branded headphones or play stations, it entices them to
purchase
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 and use them. Online shopping platforms often give more offers on various things and it is
also
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 one of the main reasons to attract youngsters. Most
of
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the
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people
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 in the early middle
age
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 group, especially family persons, tend to
purchase
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 precious
jewelry
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 as their savings.
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, they obtain gold coins or silver coins every month. Working men or women have more concentration on their
outfit
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,
selfcare
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self-care
self care
 and other things.
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 why they
purchase
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 clothes and beauty
products
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 on a regular basis. Most
of
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the
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people
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 want to relax
themselves
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on weekends
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 their hectic work schedule on weekdays.
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, they will spend money on movie tickets, shopping malls and restaurants.
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, there are some needs of old
people
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 to
fulfill
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 their daily life. Many elderly
people
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 have diabetes or hypertension constantly in
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 generation. So, they mainly do
shopping
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 for their monthly medical supplements in a pharmacy.
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 they are not affordable, they will
purchase
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 fruits and vegetables in supermarkets for
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hygienic concern. Buying story books and novels is the habit of  retired 
people
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. In conclusion, when it comes to shopping habits,
people
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’s
age
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 has more influence on them than any other factor. Young
people
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 are more interested in trendy items, middle-aged
people
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 prefer to spend on their looks and personality,
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 old
people
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 buy medicines, food items, and books.

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