Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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economy is becoming the main priority for many governments,
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others believe that local councils should
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pay attention to other
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equally. I am in
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of the latter view. There are several reasons why governments prioritize economic progress over improving other
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. For one, with good financial health, authorities can focus on other
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like
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and
healthcare
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, if the
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is not in
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financial state,
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country
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may face some challenges in the way of improving
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overall
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condition.
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, by achieving economic goals, the
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can afford to provide better living conditions and more job opportunities. Another aspect is that
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financial state makes the
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an attractive place for foreign investors, as investors know that they
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face some money-related problems like insufficient bank
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system
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in these types of countries. As everyone accepted, major
investment
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create a chance to enhance other
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, leading to a simultaneous improvement of many
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, local councils need to make progress in other
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which is becoming the main indicators of the
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’s well-being.
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,
education
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is one of the
areas
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which is helpful and practical for every
country
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. With a help of
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education
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system
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, the
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can build
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base of knowledgeable people, as well-educated workers contribute most to the development of the nation.
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but not least,
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healthcare
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the healthcare
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system
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should be well enough and developed as much as possible.
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is because if local residents are not satisfied with
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healthcare
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system
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, they tend to move to other countries with an intention of finding advanced hospitals and
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good
healthcare
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system
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. In
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way, the
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may suffer from
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reduction
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the number of
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employees and other
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difficulties
as well. After all, advanced
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and
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system
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contribute to the development of the
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equally as
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economy does. In conclusion, it is worth admitting that economic progress can be beneficial in many respects, yet it does not mean that other
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can be ignored by the
government
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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