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If some people get a chance to choose between life without work and spending most of the time working,then they would choose not to work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is considered by some, in recent years
people
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 prefer to choose a
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 without
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 compared to spent the majority of their time at
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 when they have a chance to choose one. They would prefer a
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 without any challenges and
work
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 a lot. I completely disagree with
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 opinion as there are several possible reasons. I disagree with the idea that the majority of
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 choose a
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 without
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 when they have a chance to choose one between working a lot. I think that it will cause by human behaviour. Currently, the number of
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 who are becoming lazy is increasing
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 by
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.
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 of
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, they do not want to go to the workplace in order to
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.
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, it will cause some drawbacks. The first demerit is that they can not achieve their future goals
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 as cars, and houses and one of the most necessary goals is definitely a relationship. I believe that the majority of
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 dislike
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 who do not have any aims for the future.
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, the person who does not want to
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 for their whole
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 will become unnecessary for us and even their parents.
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, I think that new technologies or new jobs which could be completed through online networking could be the main reason why
people
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 do not want to
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. These days, technologies are getting better
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 by
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. They could create a condition for
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 in order to
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 at home.
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 of
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, some factories or companies lose the number of
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 who has great job experience.
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, it would create some disadvantages for society. If the number of
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 who
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 in banks or in some kinds of workplaces stop their jobs, the inhabitants never see any civilization in their country. In conclusion, if
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 face the chance which they have to choose a
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 without
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 or spending their half-
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 in order to
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, they choose not to
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 without any hesitation. I totally disagree with the opinion for several reasons.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • constraints of employment
  • immerse
  • personal fulfillment
  • enhanced relationships
  • work-related stress
  • professional achievements
  • financial insecurity
  • societal backlash
  • cultural expectations
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