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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

There are several opinions on whether
such
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 scientific experts as doctors and engineers should be able to
work
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 only in
countries
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were
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where
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 they studied and
practiced
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practised
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 or be free at choosing a location they want to
work
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 at. Both views have significant arguments,
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however
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 I believe that it is important to let
people
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 choose their workplace themselves. Some
people
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 think that specialists that got their knowledge in different
countries
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 must return their home and
work
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 there.
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, Kazakhstan offers
to
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its
student
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students
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 various
schilarships
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scholarships
 and opportunities to study in other developed
countries
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, but after getting knowledge some students decide to stay
instead
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helping
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of helping
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 their native
country
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 to advance. The other reason is that
such
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 specialists as doctors staying to
work
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 in a foreign
country
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 are developing the economy and science of another state making
more
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it more
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 evolved.
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, the USA has many programmes for international students to offer them qualified education and after graduating it gives them opportunities to
work
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 there, so most
of
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apply
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people
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the people
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 stay. Other
people
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 believe that professionals should have a free choice to
work
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 in a
country
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 they wish.
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, most of the
countries
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people
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 are immigrating from are undeveloped and have
less
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 conditions for well-educated specialists. Many students from third world
countries
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such
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 as India after taking on education in European
countries
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 of the USA want to keep working and living there, because of all the
conviniences
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conveniences
. The second reason is that after immigrating for
work
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 professionals have
better
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a better
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 experience of communicating with
people
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 of different cultures and even learning more about their occupation because of better and more
ooportunities
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opportunities
.
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,
proffesional
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professional
 architects can learn more
working
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about working
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 and living in Italy or France, where
this
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 sector is more developed than in Kazakhstan or Russia. In conclusion, I am certainly convinced that being able to
work
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 in a desired
country
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 is essential for
professional
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professionals
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 in order to develop their skills and make them appreciate their
work
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 in a place they prefer to live.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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