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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. The chart above illustrates messages about the way
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how families of one nation used their weekly salaries. As is shown in the chart, there are several changes in the proportion of consumption in the year
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1968 and 2018. In 2018, the percentage of food sharply went down to 17%
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 a drop
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 18%. At the same time, compared with the figures in 1968, the income spent on fuel and power, clothing and
footware
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footwear
, and personal goods
also
 showed a slight decrease, with each taking up about 5% among all.
On the contrary
, the money used for leisure and housing moved in opposite directions during the period from 1968 to 2018, increasing considerably from about 10% to 20%.
In addition
, there was a little rise in transport, changing approximately from 8% to 14%.
However
, there was not a great deal of difference
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 household goods after 50 years, remaining
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 percentage of 8. In the year
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1968, people took over one in three of the money to buy food, with the least expenditure on fuel and power. After 50 years passed, the leisure which
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most
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 took up nearly a quarter of wages and the spent
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 fuel and power was still
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minor.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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