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In some countries young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this .

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Working and travel
experience
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 is one of the practical and communicational times for
students
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,
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, it is difficult for them to decide when they commit to these
experiences
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 because these surely consume a certain amount of time. Some argue that
students
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 had better try it in the period before entering university.
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 argument is partly true and working on useful for their
studies
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,
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,
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 accomplishes the negative sides.
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, it has positive aspects for
students
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 in that they can even more focus on their academic
studies
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 with the
experience
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 because they can easily find out their goals or aim of their
studies
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 as getting jobs or living in the country where they want. These
experiences
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 can help
students
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 make sure what they want in their life,
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, giving them a new way of thinking because the
education
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 from a school does not cover or teach everything that we need and the textbook does not mention the pragmatic way.
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, touching and communicating with people who have different ethics and background is a great part of the trip and
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 is hard to have in the usual school life which is consisted of neighbours.
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, the extra opportunity outside a school
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 gives
students
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 growth and a wider understanding of the world.
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, these
experiences
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 cost more
experience
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 or poorer than they expect on some occasions.
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, for work
experience
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, it is not easy to find a full-paid workplace for people who are lacking their knowledge and a lot of internships are unpaid or not enough to afford their life. In
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 aspect,
students
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 prefer to have after finishing their
education
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 in order to get a better salary and conditions.
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 to workings, it can be said that travel can not prove their
experience
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, which means
students
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 need to commit to something else
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 travelling if they want travels to work toward their getting a job or
studies
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. And
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, it costs more than their usual living. It is good for their vacation or taking rest,
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, it has a risk to spend a year for travelling. To make sure the purpose of these
experiences
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otherwise
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 they will waste their time and money.
To sum up
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, the gap year before upper
education
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 has both pros and cons in
students
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' lives and their future careers. It is necessary to put some time into considering whether to accept these issues or not before making their decisions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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