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In some developing countries, it is difficult to get good teachers to work in rural areas which can have a negative impact on the education of children in those rural communities. Why do you think good teachers do not want to work in rural area in developing countries? What could be done to solve this problem?

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Students in the backcountry are deprived of the best
education
 because good faculty members are not willing to work in these
areas
. There are many factors
due to
 which teachers hesitate to give
education
 in rural
areas
.
However
,
this
 problem can be solved. Both the factors and their solutions are discussed in the preceding paragraphs. The major reason which abides educators
to
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work in villages is less compensation. The majority of the population in these
areas
 practice agriculture and so they are not very rich.
Thus
, they can not afford the fancy fees of the tutors.
However
, teachers get attractive salaries in urban schools.
For instance
, A study shows that a teacher in a city earns 10 times more than one in a village.
Moreover
, there is a poor transportation infrastructure that connects rural
areas
 with urban
areas
.
This
 reason restricts them from providing
education
 in those
areas
.
Due to
 the above-listed reasons, students of the frontier do not get a good
education
. The problems mentioned above can be solved using technology. The government should fund the schools and help them set up with the technologies so that they can get connected with tutors from any corner of the world. Nowadays, almost every institute has computers and web cameras so
this
 will be easier for educators to help them. Even
the
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 peers from villages can learn computers which will help them to stay up to date with the latest technology.
To sum up
, the rural community is not receiving the best
education
 from tutors of urban schools
due to
 various reasons but
this
 can be overcome with the help of technology.
This
 can solve various problems.
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