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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Smoking not only harms the smoker, but also those who are nearby. Therefore, smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. You should write at least 250 words.

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Smoking is a habit
that is
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 getting more popular every day among youngsters and adults. Unfortunately, it influences not only smokers but
people
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 who live, study or work with them too. Some
people
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 think that smoking should be banned.
Pesonally
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Personally
, I agree with
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 statement and will prove
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 idea in
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 essay.
Firstly
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,
people
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 who do not smoke but have a meeting with a person who
have
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 a habit of smoking, are called secondhand smokers. They have an awful impact on their
health
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 and can suffer harmful
health
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 effects. Like namely,
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as
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coronary heart disease, stroke, lung cancer, and other diseases. It can
also
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 result in premature death.
According to
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 the data, since 1964,
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more than 2 million
people
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 who did not smoke
died
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have died
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 from problems caused by secondhand smoke exposure. A
futher
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further
 reason why smoking should be cancelled
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that
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is that
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 is an addiction that influences not only smokers but
people
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 who are nearby too.
In addition
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,
this
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 awful habit is spreading sharply. It's very easy to start smoking when someone does the same.
People
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 spend
a
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plenty of time in public places, so smoking should be banned by
government
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 in
piblic
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public
 areas to avoid negative influences on
health
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. In summary, it could be concluded that smoking
have
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has
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 negative impacts on non-smokers too. It should be prohibited to
smole
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smoke
smile
 in public
ared
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are
 to
refuce
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reduce
 the number of
people
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 who
are suffer
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are suffering
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 from serious
health
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 problems. I predict that the
amount
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number
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 of
people
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 who
smike
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smoke
 will fall
due to
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hatmful
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harmful
 effects.
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