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Sports should be compulsory in school. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Being physical is an essential component of good health which is why most people often debate whether play should be part of
school
 basic programs. I completely agree with the above statement and will discuss my reasons for taking that stance. There are numerous benefits that children can gain from play activities if made one of the basic courses. I believe recruitment will be able to relieve themselves from the stressful academic work by engaging in fitness projects.
This
 will help students to enjoy institution life as they don't only learn boring subjects but they entertain themselves with fitness projects
such
 as football and basketball.
For instance
, I did like going to
school
 when I was young but because I was one of the sports girls, I go to
school
 with joy. The number of students will increase drastically if
such
 activities are introduced in the
school
 timetable.
Furthermore
, I believe, making
such
 a subject compulsory helps enlistment to develop a passion for sports at a tender age thereby becoming great sportsmen in future.
This
 will
also
 help the country to generate revenue and reduce the rate of unemployment .
For example
, I develop a love for volleyball
while
 was in primary
school
, and kept on training even when I got older. Now being one of the best players in my state and I earn a living from that profession.
Lastly
, activities which keep us fit help improve our health, so the government will not spend a large budget on medication and hospitals as the citizens develop a love for exercise way back from
school
. In conclusion, regular exercise is important for good health ,
however
, play being part of the academic curriculum is debatable, am of the view that sports should be a compulsory course in
school
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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