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The map presents us the modify of seaside resort Templeton that happened period between 1990 and 2005.

The map presents us the modify of seaside resort Templeton that happened period between 1990 and 2005.
#modify #resort #templeton #period
The map presents us
the
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modify
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 of
seaside
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the seaside
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resort
 Templeton that happened period between 1990 and 2005.
Overall
,a comparison
two
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 maps reveals
change
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 from a largely rural to
more
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 modern
and
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 addition of the new infrastructures. As can be seen in the maps ,
big
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 distinction between 1990 and 2005 was that in 1990 the
resort
 was
a
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much greener than in 2005.
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,in 1990 ,
quit
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quite
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 a much
trees
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was
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 planted in the southeastern part of the
resort
 and there was some residential.
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, in 2005 , at the
sameplace
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same place
, trees and residences
was
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disappeared,
instead
 of them ,there was built factory. Next to the factory was built a railroad ,which did not exist before. If we go straight on the railroad, we would
in
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 the
southweastern
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southwestern
southeastern
 part of the
resort
 . There are some
high rise
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 buildings and
the
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 supermarket. Meanwhile,in 1990, in
this
 part of the
resort
 ,there was none of the above.
Although
 the
bulding
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building
, which was located in the corner, next to the
see
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sea
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,
also
 retained its
apperence
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appearance
 and place in 2005Furthermore, in 2005 many of the infrastructures
was
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 built for the convenience of the people.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words resort with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "presents" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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