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Some people think that paying taxes is enough to contribute to the society. Others argue that being a citizen involves more responsibilities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, it is believed that if we want a contribution to
society
, paying
taxes
 is enough. Meanwhile, others oppose
this
 statement and argue that as a citizen we should have more responsibilities to involves in social issues. As we know that
taxes
 are the main support for a country's development,
however
, to make a better community, we need not only money but
also
 other things which will elaborate
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this
 essay. First and foremost,
taxes
 are pivotal support to create a better life for the community. All improvements in a country are afforded by citizen
taxes
. Taking some examples, in the education aspect, the government could build schools which is free access for people who have low socio-economic status using
taxes
.
In addition
, all people can access the road and other infrastructure which is well maintained by the national budget which is from
taxes
. So, it is clearly seen that
taxes
 which are paid by citizens have a lot of contribution to
society
.
On the other hand
, it seems that paying
taxes
 is not enough to contribute to
society
. There are a lot of improvements in humanity and
society
 which is not necessarily money-giving impactful contributions. As an illustration, in the presidential and parliament ,elections people should participate in terms of political activity, at least to vote for the best candidate who will lead the government.
Furthermore
, it is hard to believe that we just rely on
taxes
 for the country's development
while
 other aspects of social development need more than cash but more on citizens' social contribution.
To conclude
, paying
taxes
 is important to create physical improvement
while
society
 needs more than money in some cases
such
 as an election. I do believe that giving contributions is not merely about cash through
taxes
 but more about social contributions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fundamental
  • development
  • public services
  • social contract
  • financially support
  • civic responsibility
  • communal activities
  • engaged in the political process
  • advocating
  • enriches
  • actively participate
  • political process
  • less fortunate
  • environmentally responsible
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