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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first line chart compares the proportion of families with three types of electrical appliances from 1920 to 2019, namely washing machines, refrigerators and vacuum cleaners. The second line graph gives information about how much time people spent doing
housework
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 over
this
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 100-year period.
It is clear that
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 constant increases in the ownership of all three appliances can be observed in the years shown,
while
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 the number of
hours
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 used per week for
housework
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 keeps decreasing. In 1920 it was very rare to see a household with a refrigerator in
this
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 country,
while
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 40% and 30% of
households
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 owned a washing machine and a vacuum cleaner respectively. Later on, the percentage of
households
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 with a refrigerator rose dramatically to 90% in 1960 and reached 100% in 1980. The figure for vacuum cleaners increased slowly but steadily,
also
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 reaching 100% in 2000. With some fluctuations, over 70% of
households
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 had a washing machine in 2019. In 1920, the time they spent doing
housework
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 was an average of 50
hours
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 a week,
while
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this
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 figure dropped to 20
hours
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 in 1960. And in 2019,
housework
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 took
households
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 a mere 10
hours
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words housework, hours, households with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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