Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving a car or motorbike. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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road
safety is one of the most urgent Use synonyms
task
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tasks
people
need to Use synonyms
have
serious considerations. In Unnecessary verb
apply
this
situation, some argue that Linking Words
road
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accidents
can be prevented by Use synonyms
rising
the legal minimum Correct your spelling
raising
age
of getting driving Use synonyms
lisenses
for a car or motorbike which Correct your spelling
licenses
need
to drive Correct subject-verb agreement
needs
throught
roads, but not the Correct your spelling
through
side-walk
. Correct your spelling
sidewalk
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the
contrary to Correct article usage
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this
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others believe Correct article usage
apply
this
idea Linking Words
do
not work for reducing Change the verb form
does
accidents
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happened
on roads. I strongly agree with the Wrong verb form
happening
later
opinion because it is no Correct your spelling
latter
relations
between the driver's Replace the word
relationship
age
and the frequency of Use synonyms
accidents
, Use synonyms
moreover
, there are other reasons which require to be more strict than Linking Words
age
limitations Use synonyms
such
as driving with Linking Words
alcohole
and Correct your spelling
alcohol
a
treatment for elderly Remove the article
apply
drivers
.
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Firstly
, the larger reason Linking Words
of
driving Change preposition
for
accidents
has caused by Use synonyms
having
alcohol Unnecessary verb
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does not connect with the Linking Words
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of Use synonyms
drivers
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For example
, in Japan, the Linking Words
driver
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driver's
lisence
allows Correct your spelling
licence
license
people
to drive Use synonyms
since
they are 18 years old, Change preposition
from
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people
can legally drink Correct word choice
and people
alcohole
from 20 years old. Correct your spelling
alcohol
Moreover
, the younger generation tends to ask their parents for picking them up. It can be said that there Linking Words
are
a lower possibility for Change the verb form
is
young
generation to become Add an article
the young
the
drunken Correct article usage
apply
drivers
. Use synonyms
Additonally
, Correct your spelling
Additionally
drunked
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drunken
drunk
drivers
are more likely to happen by Use synonyms
the
middle Correct article usage
apply
age
to drive without Use synonyms
Add a missing verb
being careful
careful
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care
due to
their confidence Linking Words
of
driving. So, Change preposition
in
drunked
driving Correct your spelling
drunken
shoud
be regarded Correct your spelling
should
more
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as more
heavey
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heavy
issues
than Fix the agreement mistake
issue
age
restrictions.
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Secondly
, the poor Linking Words
recognision
and performance of elderly Correct your spelling
recognition
drivers
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also
have led Linking Words
lots
of Change preposition
to lots
road
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accidents
every year, and the maximum legal Use synonyms
age
had better be considered than Use synonyms
minimum
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the minimum
age
. In the system of Use synonyms
driver
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driver's
lisence
, Correct your spelling
licenses
drivers
do not expire of their lisence Use synonyms
onece
they get it, except for a huge violation. It means that Correct your spelling
once
people
who have physical difficulties like poor Use synonyms
eye sight
, hard for hearing and slow recognition as getting older are still recognised the same as how they used to be without these symptoms. The treatment Correct your spelling
eyesight
to
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of
this
situation needs more prioritised solutions to protect Linking Words
people
from Use synonyms
road
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accidents
.
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To sum up
, the restriction toward legal Linking Words
age
for Use synonyms
lisences
can not be the solution Correct your spelling
licences
of
building Change preposition
to
safety
Replace the word
safe
Use synonyms
road
Fix the agreement mistake
roads
due to
the lacking of understanding about the other factors which occur Linking Words
Use synonyms
road
Change preposition
in road
accidents
. Use synonyms
Therefore
, I barely agree with Linking Words
this
idea and I believe other causes of Linking Words
accidents
should be focused Use synonyms
more
.Change preposition
on more
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