Many people believe that social media sites ( such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society

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Most
people
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think that social media
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Instagram or
Facebook
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have had a huge negative effect on individuals
people
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as well society and communities.
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, I believe that social networks are beneficial for
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. I agree that
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thought. It is
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damaging impact
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our health.
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with, nowadays all
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have social media on their mobile
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. The effect online social network has had on each individual person.
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, some
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brought social media all day
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as
Facebook
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whereas
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before developing new technologies, most
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have the option to meet and communicate with someone outside of their immediate circle and community.
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,
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also
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has social groups namely, some individuals have a chance to meet and take part in discussions with
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.
On the other hand
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, the effect that
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almost all
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can only be seen as negative.
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many
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within the local community are no longer forming close or supportive relationships.
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, society is becoming increasingly. As
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spend full time online with
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they have never met face to face with
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a person
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, who they were unlikely to ever meet in the future.
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,
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social network
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of our lives. Because almost all
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have kept in touch with every person through online sites. Shortly speaking, some
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point out that
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site impacts our lives. Local communities should do more to try and involve local
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in local activities in order to promote the future of community life
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