Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, many

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and drink are still having

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as their major ingredient which

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many negative effects on our health. Some people propose that

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of the products with

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should be increased to a high level in order to limit people’s purchase of them. I disagree with

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argument, and the

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of its bad impacts on the

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order and the prediction of under-expected outcoming will prove

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.

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, improving goods’

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price

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without relevant economic reasons will cause

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disorder

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our

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. As we all know,

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which is a basic material

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has a very low cost in the

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. If the sellers are enforced by the government to add the

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straightly without new added value, their business will be very poor. And some people purchase

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they like to eat

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but

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just can afford

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this low-price food

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food

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. So increasing the

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blindly will have a very negative effect both on our economy and society.

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, if we improve

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by adding more expensive ingredients or

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the low-value material with more valuable ones, the customers will more likely to accept these

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changes.

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, improving

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without rational reasons will not work well for the

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.

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, just increasing the

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of

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with

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cannot solve our fundamental problem.

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, many people won’t be stopped to buy

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with

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just because of the increased

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. What’s more, if they want to eat

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with

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, like cakes and bread. They can purchase

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and cook at home with a download instruction paper from the internet. We need to change people’s awareness of eating healthy, doing exercise to keeping fit by the publicity of mass media.

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, improving

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cannot decrease the consumption of

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sugar

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food

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in a good way. In conclusion, increasing

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of

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and drink with

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blindly will have an adverse impact on our

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and definitely cannot reach our initial

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. We need to adopt other approaches like increasing the popularity of health

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and cultivating people’s good eating

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to lower the bad impacts

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unhealthy

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.