The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a paricular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a paricular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017
The line chart depicts the figure of tourists visiting a certain Caribbean island from 2010 to 2017. It is clear from the graph that the total number of both visitors had been climbing throughout the span of time.
According to
what is shown, visitors who decided to stay on the island sustained the same level between 2010 and 2011 at 750
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thousand
people. After that, it started to increase gradually
untill
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until
it reached 1.5 million by
the
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year
2013,
then
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and then
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it remained steady for three years without any growth in its figures.
Afterwhich
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After which
, it soared again to 1.5
millions
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in 2017, after a tiny dip occurred in 2016. Some people preferred to be on cruise ships, and their numbers were less in general compared to the others. By the
year
2010
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it had a modest increment by 0.5 million. After a
year
it
wentback
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went back
to the same level. From 2012 to 2017 it was increasing progressively
untill
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until
it hit 2
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.
To sum up
, we could say that visitors on the island were higher between 2010 and 2015. By the
year
2016 people that stayed on the cruise ships took
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first place.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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