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Some peole believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers, should be requiredd to work in the country where they did theier training. Others believe they should be free to work in another coiuntry if they wish. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some peole believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers, should be requiredd to work in the country where they did theier training. Others believe they should be free to work in another coiuntry if they wish. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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It can be debated whether people with tertiary education should remain in their home country or
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 allowed to
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emigrate
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. It is a clear disadvantage for a country if its skilled workforce is migrating offshore. There is no doubt, that highly trained employees are valuable assets to a country.
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, in the past
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century
 Germany had many engineers and great inventors, especially in the car industry. In fact, the term “German made” became a synonym for quality
craftmanship
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. Those people were educated and worked in their nation. There are those
on the other hand
, that believe professionals are free to choose their place of employment.
Economic
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downturn
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 and governmental instability may count towards numerous reasons why
white collar
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 workers choose to work
elsewhere
. It is their freedom of choice that needs to be protected. Even if it means
loosing
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 intellectual capacity. Typically poorer nations struggle to provide attractive work opportunities for
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 intellectual elite.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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