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Parents should set punishments in some ways if their children break the law. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is sometimes argued that offspring should be educated through
punishments
 by their
parents
 in many cases. From my point of view, I believe that punishing children could have good impacts on their behaviour and thinking in the
future
, as I shall explain in more detail throughout the following paragraphs. First and foremost, adults could educate their children in terms of thinking and responsibility through
punishments
. For many
parents
 who have naughty sons or daughters,
punishments
 could be effective methods to teach them to be responsible and the ability to think twice before doing every activity.
Thus
, they could learn how to be accountable and responsible to deal with some detrimental consequences that they have done.
For instance
, to teach a child who has broken a flower vase, some Vietnamese
parents
 ask him to apologize for that vase and think about some consequences that would occur if the vase fell down into his head.
Secondly
,
punishments
 could be a possible solution to decline the criminal rate in society. If
parents
 pay more attention and care to their children, they may avoid becoming crimes in the
future
 by virtue of the supportive education from their
parents
.
Moreover
, they could raise their awareness to not make friends with the bad, who may lead to misbehaviour of the youngster. If they break the rule one time, they may relapse in the near
future
. To avoid
this
, several methods could be used, saying apologies and setting limits for their leisure activities could be practical measures. In conclusion, I concur that punishing offspring as early as possible could bring some benefits
such
 as learning about thinking, and being responsible and a decrease in the criminal ratio in the
future
.
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