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The shown charts provide information on the way of dealing with insecure garbage products in three different governments.

The shown charts provide information on the way of dealing with insecure garbage products in three different governments.
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The shown charts provide information on the way of dealing with insecure garbage
products
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 in three different governments.
Overall
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, it is seen from pictorials that hiding waste
products
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 underground is the most popular method,
while
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 incineration is the least used all over the three countries. First of all, putting the
products
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 underground takes a very large proportion of dealing with in the UK,
while
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 in Korea and
Sweden
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,Sweden
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 it is almost 2 out of 10 and just over a half, respectively.
By contrast
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, burning the
products
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 has the smallest percentages, which is 2% in
UK
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the UK
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, 9% in Korea and 20% in Sweden. Getting back to the details, it is worth noticing that chemical treatment and dumping at sea exist only in the UK,
whereas
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 recycling is in the usage in
other
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the other
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 two countries. Both chemical and dumping treatments have the same proportions, which are 8%. Meanwhile, recycling in
Republic
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the Republic
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 of Korea is 69% and in Sweden is one quarter.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words products with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provide" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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