The table shows the number of visitors to Edinburgh Zoo during the year before and and after 2 pandas were introduced . The charts show the result of surveyss asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visits, during the two periods.

The table shows the number of visitors to Edinburgh Zoo during the year before and and after 2 pandas were introduced . The charts show the result of surveyss asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visits, during the two periods.
The pie charts present the total number of visitors to Edinburgh
Zoo
, and the percentage rate of the respondents' feedback on the survey before and after the two
pandas
were introduced at the same time in two periods.
Overall
, a significant increase can be seen in the total number of tourists in Edinburgh
Zoo
after the placement of the two
pandas
compared to a period without a panda. As many went from unsatisfied to very satisfied,
while
a sizable decrease in dissatisfaction.
However
, satisfied people with no reaction remained at the same level. The year before the
pandas
, there were only 74,000 tourists at Edinburgh
Zoo
; 40% of them were satisfied with their visit, which is the highest figure. Closely followed by visitors who are dissatisfied, about 35%. Trailing behind those who expressed great dissatisfaction over their experience at 10%
while
a fraction of people shows no interest in the conducted survey ( 5%).
On the other hand
, the year after the arrival of the
pandas
, the number of people who visit the
zoo
increased significantly (82,000): and 35% of the visitors were very satisfied. Meanwhile, the satisfied ones registered the same per cent (40%), prior to the
pandas
. An obvious change is observed towards the dissatisfied group with a considerable drop (from 35 to15%), the same with very dissatisfied towards their visits (10%-5%).
Finally
, no responses at 5%, which is the lowest rate.
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