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Many young people change their jobs and careers. What are the reasons for this, Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #change #jobs #careers
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In today’s era, a
lot
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 of
people
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 tend to switch their
workplace
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 and careers. In my opinion, I believe that the advantages of
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 overweigh the disadvantages. In
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article
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 we will
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 discuss the reasons for
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 and how there are more pros to
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 concept than cons.
Firstly
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, there are a
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 of reasons why the youth is seen to constantly
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 their
jobs
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 or careers. Some of the reasons are a
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 of
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 nowadays are emotionally unstable and struggling with managing stress.
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, why they keep changing their
jobs
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. Some of the disadvantages of changing
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jobs
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 are that they do not have stability in
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. They are constantly looking to
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change
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. Some
people
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 stay in a state of dilemma
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 is the reason why they keep changing.
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 can add a
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 of pressure on their
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 and make them feel overwhelmed
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, putting a negative impact on the
people
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 they live with. A prime example would be
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a man who is a breadwinner of a family of six members, a wife and four kids. Constantly changing
jobs
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 would make his income unstable and would
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 have a negative impact on his family but a
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 of it depends on how the person deals with the situation.
On the other hand
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, there are some
people
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 who want to consistently progress and seek
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better opportunities in
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. Changing job
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 teaches you a
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 of things. Every place that you work in
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teach
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 you
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 things. One should always look for better positions and not just live
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mediocre
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.
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, I have witnessed a janitor’s son becoming a Judge. His son worked in a slum area as a waiter but constantly kept progressing in
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 and educating himself and now he is living a different
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, I would say there are more advantages
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 changing
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 disadvantages depending on the
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 of the
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career switch
  • job dissatisfaction
  • financial incentives
  • personal fulfillment
  • professional advancement
  • exploratory journey
  • toxic workplace
  • acquisition of new competencies
  • workplace flexibility
  • adapting to evolving industries
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