We cannot help everyone in the world that needs help, so we should only be concerned with our own communities and countries. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Certain groups today have argued that we cannot provide help to everyone in the
world
that needs help, so we need to be concerned only with our communities and countries
. This
essay completely disagrees with this
viewpoint because I believe that individuals
should take responsibility for the world
and all people, not only caring about environmental issues
but also
building harmonious societies
.
One reason why individuals
should care about the world
is the issue of climate change. In the modern world
, all countries
have been affected by this
phenomenon, which has led to environmental problems such
as high temperatures, high sea levels, and air pollution. Humans are the main factor behind these issues
, and therefore
, all people around the world
should care about this
phenomenon. By starting to improve these issues
through awareness about the effect of global warming. For example
, in Thailand, the government and private sector have run campaigns promoting reducing waste and driving Sustainable Development Goals, which are the world
’s goals to this
day for reducing social problems such
as environmental issues
and equality.
Another reason is the need for peaceful societies
. Building harmonious societies
starts with individuals
, which is the most essential factor for forming peaceful societies
whether they have different countries
. When some country confronts a bad situation such
as war, all countries
should help. For instance
, In Thailand, this
country has an organization for helping refugees and protecting them from bad situations.
In conclusion, it is not enough to be concerned only with our own communities and countries
. Individuals
should take responsibility for the world
and people. Particularly environmental issues
and societies
. By working together, we can make a positive difference and create a more peaceful, sustainable world
for generations to come.Submitted by pear_chanok on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite
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