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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
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Nowadays, some
people
 believe that the necessity of saying
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language
 when
people
 live abroad may lead to all kinds of negative influences. Personally, I strongly agree with
this
 opinion. On the one hand,
this
 kind of
language
 barrier may cause lots of difficulties in our daily life.
Firstly
,
people
 are likely to misunderstand native speakers' words, which may lead to some unnecessary conflicts.
For example
, I used to serve one of my foreign friends a mug of apple juice when he told me that he need some grape juice.
Actually
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 he is allergic to apples and in
this
 case,
language
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 barrier causes a bad result which could have been avoided.
Secondly
,
people
 living in
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foreign countries may struggle with going out like taking public transportation
due to
 the fact that almost every sign
is wrote
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by
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the
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language
 he is not familiar with.
On the other hand
, having to speak a foreign
language
 may
result
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 some psychological problems. Since some of the social problems are unavoidable, a considerable part of
people
 may prefer staying at home or dormitory, rather than going out to socialize with foreigners,
thus
 producing some mental problems,
such
 as social anxiety.
Moreover
, these psychological
disablities
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disabilities
 could even lead to some worse results.
For example
, some may turn to affect others if they are unable to have
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 life which meets their expectations,
thus
probaly
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probably
 causing criminals. In conclusion,
cosidering
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considering
 the listed detrimental results
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 barrier can lead to, I do agree with
this
 statement.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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