The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.
The table compares and contrasts
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students
admission rates
of
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Manchester
University
, based on five different categories , which were measured in percentage over an 80-
year
time period from 1937 to 2017.
Overall
,
students
from within 40 miles of the site and the proportion of male undergraduates accounted
the
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lowest enrollment
at the end
of the
year
.
Whereas
, for
other
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three categories it was quite the opposite.
To begin
with, only 327
students
got admission
on
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Manchester
University
at the initial .
However
, after that reported a dramatic increase in
the
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student enrollment and reached 6254 admissions in 2017.
Moreover
, when comparing the proportion of men and women in
university
we can see that in the initial
year
, 55% of males got enrolled
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the campus .
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, for the
,
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females it was 5% less .
However
, after 80 years it showed quite the opposite rating .
Furthermore
, the pupil who was from within 40 miles of the
University
had the same enrollment ratio as the male proportion on campus at the beginning of
year
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.
However
, following years it lost
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popularity and made up 1-2% in 2017.
On the other hand
, the ratio of
students
who were from abroad was very less and it was 6% from 4 nations
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after 80 years the popularity of the
university
surged moderately and constituted 32% from 102 countries in the latter
year
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, university, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • student enrolments
  • university
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • comparison
  • trend
  • change
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuation
  • significant
  • noteworthy
  • remarkable
  • notable
  • surprising
  • conclusion
  • insights
  • summary
  • overview
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