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The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.
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The table compares and contrasts
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students
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 admission rates
of
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 Manchester
University
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 , based on five different categories , which were measured in percentage over an 80-
year
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 time period from 1937 to 2017.
Overall
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,
students
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 from within 40 miles of the site and the proportion of male undergraduates accounted
the
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 lowest enrollment
at the end
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 of the
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 .
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 three categories it was quite the opposite.
To begin
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 with, only 327
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 got admission
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 Manchester
University
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 at the initial .
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, after that reported a dramatic increase in
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student enrollment and reached 6254 admissions in 2017.
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, when comparing the proportion of men and women in
university
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 we can see that in the initial
year
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, 55% of males got enrolled
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 the campus .
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females it was 5% less .
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, after 80 years it showed quite the opposite rating .
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 , the pupil who was from within 40 miles of the
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 had the same enrollment ratio as the male proportion on campus at the beginning of
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year
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.
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, following years it lost
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 popularity and made up 1-2% in 2017.
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 , the ratio of
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 who were from abroad was very less and it was 6% from 4 nations
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 after 80 years the popularity of the
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 surged moderately and constituted 32% from 102 countries in the latter
year
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however, whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, university, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • student enrolments
  • university
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • comparison
  • trend
  • change
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuation
  • significant
  • noteworthy
  • remarkable
  • notable
  • surprising
  • conclusion
  • insights
  • summary
  • overview
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