The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017.
The table compares and contrasts
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student
students
admission rates of
Manchester Change preposition
at
University
, based on five different categories , which were measured in percentage over an 80-year
time period from 1937 to 2017.
Overall
, students
from within 40 miles of the site and the proportion of male undergraduates accounted the
lowest enrollment Change preposition
for the
at the end
of the year
. Whereas
, for other
three categories it was quite the opposite.
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the other
To begin
with, only 327 students
got admission on
Manchester Change preposition
to
University
at the initial . However
, after that reported a dramatic increase in the
student enrollment and reached 6254 admissions in 2017. Correct article usage
apply
Moreover
, when comparing the proportion of men and women in university
we can see that in the initial year
, 55% of males got enrolled to
the campus . Change preposition
on
Whereas
, for the ,
females it was 5% less . Remove the comma
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However
, after 80 years it showed quite the opposite rating .
Furthermore
, the pupil who was from within 40 miles of the University
had the same enrollment ratio as the male proportion on campus at the beginning of year
. Add an article
the year
However
, following years it lost it's
popularity and made up 1-2% in 2017. Replace the word
its
On the other hand
, the ratio of students
who were from abroad was very less and it was 6% from 4 nations By contrast
,
after 80 years the popularity of the Remove the comma
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university
surged moderately and constituted 32% from 102 countries in the latter year
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