IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

Parents are trying to learn how to take care of their children. Is this essential? Give your opinion on this and illustrate an example.

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Children
Use synonyms
tutors
Use synonyms
 have already become popular nowadays, many
parents
Use synonyms
 decide to reach
children
Use synonyms
tutors
Use synonyms
 when they are were the first
time
Use synonyms
 as
parents
Use synonyms
. They want to learn how to take care of their
children
Use synonyms
 from the
children
Use synonyms
's
tutors
Use synonyms
. I will argue
this
Linking Words
 topic in
this
Linking Words
 passage.
To begin
Linking Words
 with, many
children
Use synonyms
 tutor the experts in their field. They will give some expert opinions and they
also
Linking Words
 have many experiences in rise
children
Use synonyms
. They can teach new
parents
Use synonyms
 well.
Such
Linking Words
 as what should
children
Use synonyms
 eat daily or how to raise
children
Use synonyms
's interest in hobbies. That can make kids'
parents
Use synonyms
 feel comfortable and have less pressure when they take care of their own
children
Use synonyms
 rather than lose their hands. But on the anther side, reaching
children
Use synonyms
's
tutors
Use synonyms
 is an expensive payment for many normal families. Only a little part of
parents
Use synonyms
 who live in urban cities can afford the salary of a
children
Use synonyms
's tutor.
That is
Linking Words
also
Linking Words
 the reason why most families prefer to ask the old in their families when they have kids than pay for
children
Use synonyms
's
tutors
Use synonyms
. 
In addition
Linking Words
, many
parents
Use synonyms
 both need to go out to work every day. They don't have enough
time
Use synonyms
 on learning new knowledge. And most of them will send their
children
Use synonyms
's grandparents. Having
children
Use synonyms
tutors
Use synonyms
 will waste their money and their valuable
time
Use synonyms
. In conclusion, if a new family of threesome want to learn some key points on taking care of
children
Use synonyms
, having
children
Use synonyms
 tutor will be a nice choice. But if the
parents
Use synonyms
 don't have enough spare
time
Use synonyms
 and don't have enough money, there is no need to find
children
Use synonyms
tutors
Use synonyms
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: