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Write about the following topic: Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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Parenting is one of the hardest
skills
 to acquire. Some argue that these
skills
 should be thought in schools
,
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 so that young adults can learn and apply them in future. I strongly agree with
this
 opinion.
This
 essay will outline my reasoning to support
this
 opinion and the
skills
 required to become a good
parent
. Parenting requires mastery of many areas.
Firstly
, a good
parent
 should know how to understand a
child
's needs.
This
 could vary by age, a baby may express its needs by crying,
whereas
 a young adult may express their needs by arguing. Either way, a
parent
 should have the knowledge to anticipate these needs and address them.
Secondly
, a
parent
 should know how to keep a
child
 healthy. It includes providing first aid, frequent vaccinations, taking care of sick children at home and many others.
For instance
, many preventable
child
 deaths are linked to improper vaccinations
due to
 a lack of awareness. It is a good idea to teach these vital
skills
 at a young age in schools. At a young age, children have a higher capacity to learn compared to an adult,
hence
 enabling them to absorb
this
 important information and become good parents in the future.
Furthermore
, a
child
 learning these
skills
 at school can apply them at home
while
 taking care of their younger siblings. In conclusion, multiple
skills
such
 as understanding a
child
's needs and health requirements are required to become a good
parent
. I believe that these
skills
 should be thought in schools where children have a higher capacity to learn and at the same time allow them to apply the learning at home.
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