It is a natural process that animal species become extinct, as the dinosaurs did in the past. There is no reason for people to prevent this from happening. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Up to today, it is evident that we have lost many animal species like dinosaurs and dodos.

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people argue that natural disasters have caused these extinctions, I believe humans cannot wait and see

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idly. Because it is vital to maintain the ecosystem, and people have a moral duty on behalf of

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, though some people justify extinction happening

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natural calamities and natural processes, there is ample proof that human activities like deforestation, overhunting and pollution are the predominant factors for

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devastation.

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overhunting, dodos disappeared from the earth. So it is inevitably proven that we are the culprit of

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offence.

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, humankind has a responsibility and obligation to preserve and prevent

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harm to our nature. Another reason is that many species play a crucial role in maintaining the balance of ecosystems.

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, bees which are essential pollinators of mother- nature, are responsible for pollinating 80% of flowering plants. If we imagine that one-day bees are going to disappear from the planet,

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the whole ecosystem and

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food supply will be collapsed.

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, all animals have their own intrinsic values so humans do not have the right to determine

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should be given priority to live on the earth.

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, human beings should give respect to the inherent value of all kinds of animals because all we are interrelated within

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vicious cycle.

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extinction may be a natural process, it is not a justification to withdraw responsibility and obligation towards the natural environmental system. By taking action to conserve their habitats and their right to live here,

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we can enjoy the diversity of nature and our lives too.

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