The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017
The line graph gives information about how many tourists visited a Caribbean
island
from 2010 to 2017. In general, the number of tourists
all
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went up to some degree, and the
quantity
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number
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of
visitors
who stayed on cruise ships was a little more than the
visitors
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number of visitors
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stayed
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who stayed
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on
island
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the island
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in 2017. Obviously, there was a significant increase in the number of
visitors
staying on cruise ships, which increased from less than 0.5
million
to 2
million
, during the whole period, exceeding that of their counterparts who stayed on
island
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the island
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after 2015.
Moreover
, there was a slight rise of 0.75
million
in the
quantity
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number
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of
visitors
staying on
island
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the island
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between 2010 and 2015, after which it fell to 1.25
million
until 2016, followed by another
increased
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back to 1.5
million
in 2017. The number of
visitors
who like staying on
island
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the island
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became the smallest over the period from 2010 to 2017.
In addition
, a smooth upward trend occurred in the amount of total, which increased from 1
million
to 3
million
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words island, visitors, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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