The maps below show the development of a city in HCM in 1995 and now.
The two maps illustrate how one
city
in HCM was developed in two different years.
The city
had a lot of agricultural facilities in 1995. For example
, there was a big farmland in the northeast and a big fishing port in the south. Also
there was a big shopping line near the sea coast, which included a lot of shops and a fish market. Add a comma
,Also
Moreover
, a big forest park can be found almost in the centre of the city
, just between the farmland and a relaxing part in the southeast, where a cafe and a hotel are located. A big number of living houses are situated in the northwest.
During more than 2 decades the city
became more attractive to tourists. The land for farming and the forest are used as a golf and tennis court today and the fishing port disappeared. Also
, all shops and the fish market are replaced with new apartments and a restaurant. Moreover
, it is clear that
the city
became bigger due to
the reason that the number of living buildings in the north-west increased.
Overall
, the city
in HCM was an agricultural centre but now it became an attraction for tourists.Submitted by mgshetler on
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