More and more wild animals are being kept in the zoo these days. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?

Nowadays, a numerous number of wild
animals
have been living in cages
although
their fundamental place is
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area,
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it
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some pros and cons. In
this
essay, I will argue which side
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havier
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than
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side.
Firstly
, I will explain some
disadvantage
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of
this
and why are being kept these
animals
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zoo
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. In the
last
decade, wild
animals
have
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brought from different
kind
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of countries ,
for example
, Africa, Mexico,
Vietnam
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. In my opinion, in
zoos
people who are in charge of
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wild
animals
treat them badly,
animals
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also
have been living
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, in
this
point of view, I do not agree that these magnificent creatures must hold in
this
kind of terrible
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.
Additionally
, wild
animals
are able to carry some sort of dangerous diseases and in
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people are in danger.
Moreover
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these
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cages where the
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, these are not doing enough to enhance their welfare.
Secondly
, there are several advantages
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kepting
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keeping
wild
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in
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large
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.
For instance
, people easily can keep
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them
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,
as well as
children are able to see them in real life which is one of the most exciting and interesting
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all over the world.
In addition
, humans may be able to feed these creatures if it has been allowed.
On the other hand
, some sort of
animals
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generation is going to decrease and their name is placed Red Book
such
as panda,
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bear. In
this
respect, some governments especially China choose to solve reducing of panda generation. In conclusion, they gained
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success in
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situation and their name
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from Red Book.
Moreover
, one advantage in
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of
zoos
is that they protect
animals
from starvation, predators,
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loss. In
addionally
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additionally
, breeding programs is another
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for endangered species and they bring these species from wild habitat into
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places.
To conclude
, there are a lot of pros and cons
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this
trend which
are
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most important for each part. I explained both of
parts
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which is really necessary and in my point of
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both
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have
outweigh
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to
another
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.
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