More and more wild animals are being kept in the zoo these days. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh its disadvantages?
Nowadays, a numerous number of wild
animals
have been living in cages although
their fundamental place is large
area, Add an article
a large
however
it Add a comma
,however
have
some pros and cons. In Change the verb form
has
this
essay, I will argue which side be
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
havier
than Correct your spelling
heavier
Correct article usage
the other
other
side.
Change the wording
another
Firstly
, I will explain some disadvantage
of Fix the agreement mistake
disadvantages
this
and why are being kept these animals
inAdd an article
the
a
zoo
. In the Fix the agreement mistake
zoos
last
decade, wild animals
have being
brought from different Change the form of the verb
been
kind
of countries ,Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
for example
, Africa, Mexico, Vietnam
. In my opinion, in Correct word choice
and Vietnam
zoos
people who are in charge of care
Wrong verb form
caring
to
wild Change preposition
for
animals
treat them badly, animals
Correct word choice
and animals
also
have been living dirty
Change preposition
in dirty
place
, in Fix the agreement mistake
places
this
point of view, I do not agree that these magnificent creatures must hold in this
kind of terrible zoos
. Fix the agreement mistake
zoo
Additionally
, wild animals
are able to carry some sort of dangerous diseases and in Fix the agreement mistake
situations
situation
people are in danger. Add a comma
,situation
Moreover
, in
Change preposition
apply
these
cages where the Correct determiner usage
the
animals
are being hold
, these are not doing enough to enhance their welfare.
Change the verb form
are being held
are holding
Secondly
, there are several advantages Change preposition
to kepting
kepting
wild Correct your spelling
keeping
animals
in the
large Correct article usage
apply
zoos
. For instance
, people easily can keep touch
Change preposition
in touch
them
, Change preposition
with them
as well as
children are able to see them in real life which is one of the most exciting and interesting activity
all over the world. Change to a plural noun
activities
In addition
, humans may be able to feed these creatures if it has been allowed. On the other hand
, some sort of animals
generation is going to decrease and their name is placed Red Book Change the noun form
animal
such
as panda, polar
bear. In Correct word choice
and polar
this
respect, some governments especially China choose to solve reducing of panda generation. In conclusion, they gained a
success in Remove the article
apply
this
situation and their name erase
from Red Book. Change the verb form
erases
Moreover
, one advantage in favor
of Change the spelling
favour
zoos
is that they protect animals
from starvation, predators, habitat
loss. In Correct word choice
and habitat
addionally
, breeding programs is another Correct your spelling
additionally
favor
for endangered species and they bring these species from wild habitat into Change the spelling
favour
safety
places.
Replace the word
safe
To conclude
, there are a lot of pros and cons in
Change preposition
to
this
trend which are
most important for each part. I explained both of Change the verb form
is
parts
which is really necessary and in my point of Correct article usage
the parts
Correct your spelling
view
veiw
both Add a comma
,veiw
part
have Change to a plural noun
parts
outweigh
to Change the verb form
outweighed
another
.Correct pronoun usage
other
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